This could have been a much better book. The basic plot was good enough, but it felt rushed, as though the author were in a big hurry to get to the end. Partly because of this, the characters never became more than two-dimensional with some of them being just the usual flat stereotypes.
There were some discontenting grammar and punctuation flaws, such as a repetition of the phrase "a roll of the eyes was given" with no punctuation or capitalization. I don't know why the author didn't simply write, "She rolled her eyes," but it got to be annoying and broke the train of the action for the reader. Also, there were a lot of sentences strung together with commas instead of periods, and that made some of them harder to figure out what thought went with what thought.
I suspect this was self-published, not a bad thing, but just not enough editing and revision by a competent editor.
Still, it was a quick read, though a lightweight one, and really wasn't scary at all..or even very romantic since, with the character development being superficial, the romance was superficial and hackneyed as well.
There were some discontenting grammar and punctuation flaws, such as a repetition of the phrase "a roll of the eyes was given" with no punctuation or capitalization. I don't know why the author didn't simply write, "She rolled her eyes," but it got to be annoying and broke the train of the action for the reader. Also, there were a lot of sentences strung together with commas instead of periods, and that made some of them harder to figure out what thought went with what thought.
I suspect this was self-published, not a bad thing, but just not enough editing and revision by a competent editor.
Still, it was a quick read, though a lightweight one, and really wasn't scary at all..or even very romantic since, with the character development being superficial, the romance was superficial and hackneyed as well.
